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This really needs an editor.

It starts off great, with a compelling story about responding to a roadside emergency, but then it veers off the interstate and meanders through the countryside. The paragraphs — they compound. The em-dashes — they multiply. Words upon words and I still don’t know what the author is trying to say. Something about a system for responding to corporate pseudo-emergencies. I guess.

I’m a writer. I get what a preface is for. And I get why an executive coach writes a book (and it ain’t the royalties). But please, please: hire a development editor. Preferably one not named Claude.

(PS: emdashes are supposed to be used—as a copyeditor once told me—without spaces on either side. It’s one of the ways you can tell the true lover of the emdash from an LLM.)

> "Then I run the XABCs, a rapid field assessment protocol"

It seems like every time I read about first aid procedures, there's something new since I last learnt it. This is the first time I've seen the X at the start. TBH, I'm still trying to remember if you do rescue breaths or not while doing CPR

Wow, a whole book written in the style of a self-promoting ChatGPT-generated LinkedIn post!

Real leaders don’t describe themselves as “leaders” ten times in as many paragraphs. The self-aggrandizement in describing your corporate career really undermines the attempt at humility when talking about your EMT work.

I would avoid sentences of the form "It's not A. It's B." It reads very LLM-like.